So I'm sitting at work and I just cannot stop thinking about you.
I'm thinking about you like a heart thinks about veins. Like a surgeon thinks about brains. Like a gangster thinks about chains. I'm thinking about you like a player thinks about who's in the stands. Like girls think about boy bands. Like a hand thinks about holding another hand. I'm thinking about you like Ms. Dalton thinks about pottery. Like a gambler thinks about winning the lottery. Seriously. I'm thinking about you like i'm thinking about you. I'm thinking about you like a bride thinks about saying, "I do". Like hair thinks about shampoo. I'm thinking about you like Ke$ha thinks about waking up feeling like P. Diddy. Like boys think about girls that are pretty. I'm thinking about you like a bandit thinks about a catchy nickname. Like a picture thinks about a frame. Like Lady Gaga thinks about the LoveGame. For real. You're the best. Which is why I'm thinking about you like a hippy thinks about a good protest. Like a knight thinks about his quest. Oh shoot, I'm thinking about you like my boss thinks about letting me go. Or was that Sean Kingston? Either way, I'm always thinking about y-o-u.
*DING DING DING* I think we have a winner. You had a lot of really good lines. I'm impressed Mr. Freud. Well done.
ReplyDeleteHey I liked how you changed up the format. It did lack a little bit of the rhythm that the continues (and repetitive) "I'm thinking about you like...". BUT i liked it. It made it stand out from all the others. It was different. Much closer to the original poem we watched in class. Right on Freud!
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Dude, whoever you are, this thing was freaking hilarious. I looooved how you connected to music but the part i liked most was with how much humor and honesty you wrote this. I don't know if you really care about what I'm writing here right now, but yeah it was just awesome.
ReplyDeleteVery creative! I loved it. The part about Ms Dalton really shows you think about this person/ thing a lot! ha ha
ReplyDeleteHahah this was so good! I loved it. I really liked the bride saying I do, the lady gaga and sean kingston one! Heck, i liked all of them!! Goood job. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat references. My favorite line was the hippy thinking about a protest. Your writing is very conversational. Which I guess means you have a good writing voice. It's fun to read.
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